Here we are again. Yes I am writing again, and I assure you I shall not leave this fanfiction. This one was planned and I have an editor so I'm all good. I have a far better set up than last time. I also have a good story to tell. "The Back Story" the story of Team Plasma. Hope you like it. POST POST POST. Post on the thread I would love that very much. So yes criticism is ALLOWED. Thank you. I'll post Chapter One soon. Also under each characters will be a list of Chapters and I will put information that happens to that character in a "spoiler" so nothing is revealed to new readers. Thank You. -.VooDoo Varsity.
Name: Stanton Farmer Jr. (Goes by either Stanton or Stan) Age: 19 Bio: Stanton was born in Mossdeep City. He lived there till he was 17, then he moved to Driftveil City and is there currently. He is the son of Stanton and Julie Farmer. Chapter 1-3
Stanton captures a Sandile. Stanton battles a girl named Ally, Sandile vs Sawsbuck, and it ended in a draw. Stanton is headed to Opelucid, he challenges Brycen while in a Icirrus City.
Name: Felton Volts Age: 17 Bio: Felton was born and raised in Accumula Town. He is the son of and Conner and Jessica Volts. He is also not very fond of Pokemon, but wants to become top trainer. This is extremely hard for him. Chapter 1-3
Felton is trying to catch is first pokemon. Felton catches a Pidove and battles a friend a loses. Felton hears about Team Plasma and a rebelion, Rebel Ice.
Name: Kayla Christopherson Age: 16 Bio: Kayla was born in the small town of Lavender of the Kanto region. When she turned 16 she moved to Castelia City. She is the daughter of Patrik and Faith Christopherson. Her Dad died when she was four. Chapter 1-4
Kayla is trying to fit in the city crowd by buying fancy cloths. On the way home from shopping she befriends a Tynamo. She finally gets to see her dad battle and gets to see him as well in a weird vision. In the city she meets with Felton and sees Team Plasma in action.
Name: Lorelei Gilmor (Goes by Rory) Age: 18 Bio: Lorelei, or Rory for short, was born in Mahogany Town. She moved to Icirrus City when she was 7. She is the daughter of Christopher and Samantha Gilmor. Chapter 1-3
Rory is good friends with the Gym Leader, Brycen, who is training her. Rory receives a Cubchoo from her mentor Brycen. While training Cubchoo she is attacked by Team Plasma then rescued by ???
This is a major improvement writing wise from your previous fanfiction (whether it be because of an editor or not), and it was much more enjoyable to read!
If I were to make a couple suggestions it would be to tune up on when to use periods and commas (ex: "It was a Patrat. A small rat with buck teeth and a long tail." those should probably be one sentence) and make sure to get your "yours" right (ex. "Your so lazy..." it's "You're"in this case). [/minicritique]
I do have one last note, though it's not so much a criticism so much as a question: are Lorelei and Brycen supposed to speak a little like Yoda?
Haha thanks for posting. Divock: first about the Yoda thing, when I was writing this I noticed that, I didn't change it cause it made it seem like they were the wiser ones... I think its overall better than the first fanfic is because 1. I do have an editor 2. I planned this fanfiction, and I start working off the chapter with a brief summary so I know what its going to be about. So basically is just I actually PLANNED this story... and an editor does REALLY help.
PokemonDragon: DO IT, do it NOW!! I really like it when people ask me that question cause it makes me look good =P